I've set up a little workshop to show the different ways I could format the flashbacks at the end of Book Four. I want to keep the gimmick of parallel dialog / monologue (it's an homage to Alan Moore I've been planning for a while--make that 5 months O_O), but I'm not sure what formatting is ideal, or if it's really possible to pull off in a non-graphic novel at all.
I'd realy love to know what you think might work. In other words:
HALP.
Dotted Thought Bubbles
"Very funny." Dee frowned. There was something Galatea had said, when he stormed out on her. What was it?
"…you aren't changing…"
"Look at that," Tomoe said, "you can almost see him thinking."
"…What kind of name is Deiter Detwiler…"
"Still waters run deep," Ursula declared.
"…Maybe you just didn't know who you really were before now…"
"I've always hated that expression," Yves said.
"…Don't tell me. You never know when a secret identity might come in handy…"
"Yeah, me too," SB agreed. "Still waters don't run deep. Still waters don't run."
"…Fire can't burn me, iron can't break me…"
Yves and SB grinned like idiots at each other and chorused, "Or else they wouldn't be still."
"…Yves, you're a kung fu badass…"
"It's just an aphorism," Ursula murmured, soothing the thick rubber collar around her neck.
"…I'm a pharmaceutria. A sorceress. I'm a witch…"
"I can't see shit!" Raz bumbled out of an aisle, two jockstraps tied over her eyes.
"…Shut up and let Sherlock do his thing…"
"We're not perverts," Dee said under his breath, looking at all his friends in turn.
"…We didn't expect a...band, or league, or whatever it is you've put together…"
Eurydice crept up and took his hand. "What did you say?"
"…you aren't changing…"
"We're not perverts," Dee told her, kissed her, and told everyone. "We're superheroes."
"…you're just becoming more you…"
Eurydice asked, "There's a difference?"
Plain Brackets with Comic Bubble Boldfacing
"Very funny." Dee frowned. There was something Galatea had said, when he stormed out on her. What was it?
["…you aren't changing…"]
"Look at that," Tomoe said, "you can almost see him thinking."
["…What kind of name is Deiter Detwiler…"]
"Still waters run deep," Ursula declared.
["…Maybe you just didn't know who you really were before now…"]
"I've always hated that expression," Yves said.
["…Don't tell me. You never know when a secret identity might come in handy…"]
"Yeah, me too," SB agreed. "Still waters don't run deep. Still waters don't run."
["…Fire can't burn me, iron can't break me…"]
Yves and SB grinned like idiots at each other and chorused, "Or else they wouldn't be still."
["…Yves, you're a kung fu badass…"]
"It's just an aphorism," Ursula murmured, soothing the thick rubber collar around her neck.
["…I'm a pharmaceutria. A sorceress. I'm a witch…"]
"I can't see shit!" Raz bumbled out of an aisle, two jockstraps tied over her eyes.
["…Shut up and let Sherlock do his thing…"]
"We're not perverts," Dee said under his breath, looking at all his friends in turn.
["…We didn't expect a...band, or league, or whatever it is you've put together…"]
Eurydice crept up and took his hand. "What did you say?"
["…you aren't changing…"]
"We're not perverts," Dee told her, kissed her, and told everyone. "We're superheroes."
["…you're just becoming more you…"]
Eurydice asked, "There's a difference?"
Plain Brackets
Using the small font ["...format the flashback..."] format I've been using so far throughout IAT.
"Very funny." Dee frowned. There was something Galatea had said, when he stormed out on her. What was it?
["…you aren't changing…"]
"Look at that," Tomoe said, "you can almost see him thinking."
["…What kind of name is Deiter Detwiler…"]
"Still waters run deep," Ursula declared.
["…Maybe you just didn't know who you really were before now…"]
"I've always hated that expression," Yves said.
["…Don't tell me. You never know when a secret identity might come in handy…"]
"Yeah, me too," SB agreed. "Still waters don't run deep. Still waters don't run."
["…Fire can't burn me, iron can't break me…"]
Yves and SB grinned like idiots at each other and chorused, "Or else they wouldn't be still."
["…Yves, you're a kung fu badass…"]
"It's just an aphorism," Ursula murmured, soothing the thick rubber collar around her neck.
["…I'm a pharmaceutria. A sorceress. I'm a witch…"]
"I can't see shit!" Raz bumbled out of an aisle, two jockstraps tied over her eyes.
["…Shut up and let Sherlock do his thing…"]
"We're not perverts," Dee said under his breath, looking at all his friends in turn.
["…We didn't expect a...band, or league, or whatever it is you've put together…"]
Eurydice crept up and took his hand. "What did you say?"
["…you aren't changing…"]
"We're not perverts," Dee told her, kissed her, and told everyone. "We're superheroes."
["…you're just becoming more you…"]
Eurydice asked, "There's a difference?"
Beige Thought Bubbles
Thought bubbles as formatted in the update.
"Very funny." Dee frowned. There was something Galatea had said, when he stormed out on her. What was it?
"…you aren't changing…"
"Look at that," Tomoe said, "you can almost see him thinking."
"…What kind of name is Deiter Detwiler…"
"Still waters run deep," Ursula declared.
"…Maybe you just didn't know who you really were before now…"
"I've always hated that expression," Yves said.
"…Don't tell me. You never know when a secret identity might come in handy…"
"Yeah, me too," SB agreed. "Still waters don't run deep. Still waters don't run."
"…Fire can't burn me, iron can't break me…"
Yves and SB grinned like idiots at each other and chorused, "Or else they wouldn't be still."
"…Yves, you're a kung fu badass…"
"It's just an aphorism," Ursula murmured, soothing the thick rubber collar around her neck.
"…I'm a pharmaceutria. A sorceress. I'm a witch…"
"I can't see shit!" Raz bumbled out of an aisle, two jockstraps tied over her eyes.
"…Shut up and let Sherlock do his thing…"
"We're not perverts," Dee said under his breath, looking at all his friends in turn.
"…We didn't expect a...band, or league, or whatever it is you've put together…"
Eurydice crept up and took his hand. "What did you say?"
"…you aren't changing…"
"We're not perverts," Dee told her, kissed her, and told everyone. "We're superheroes."
"…you're just becoming more you…"
Eurydice asked, "There's a difference?"
More Subtle Thought Bubbles
"Very funny." Dee frowned. There was something Galatea had said, when he stormed out on her. What was it?
"…you aren't changing…"
"Look at that," Tomoe said, "you can almost see him thinking."
"…What kind of name is Deiter Detwiler…"
"Still waters run deep," Ursula declared.
"…Maybe you just didn't know who you really were before now…"
"I've always hated that expression," Yves said.
"…Don't tell me. You never know when a secret identity might come in handy…"
"Yeah, me too," SB agreed. "Still waters don't run deep. Still waters don't run."
"…Fire can't burn me, iron can't break me…"
Yves and SB grinned like idiots at each other and chorused, "Or else they wouldn't be still."
"…Yves, you're a kung fu badass…"
"It's just an aphorism," Ursula murmured, soothing the thick rubber collar around her neck.
"…I'm a pharmaceutria. A sorceress. I'm a witch…"
"I can't see shit!" Raz bumbled out of an aisle, two jockstraps tied over her eyes.
"…Shut up and let Sherlock do his thing…"
"We're not perverts," Dee said under his breath, looking at all his friends in turn.
"…We didn't expect a...band, or league, or whatever it is you've put together…"
Eurydice crept up and took his hand. "What did you say?"
"…you aren't changing…"
"We're not perverts," Dee told her, kissed her, and told everyone. "We're superheroes."
"…you're just becoming more you…"
Eurydice asked, "There's a difference?"
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